Comment on: https://vbravosite.wordpress.com/2017/04/13/la-lune-lament/comment-page-1/#comment-77

Hi Victoria! Since I chose the same topic, I wanted to see how other people responded to the creative writing task. To my amazement, you’ve blown it out of the park quite literally. There’s always something much more profound and moving about a sad tale or a tragedy. Your story of the tragedy of the moon perfectly frames the folly that is mankind! My only suggestion would be to use your tragedy to make some kind of change. You end too soon with an ‘all hope is lost’ approach (of course this comment is purely my own opinion). You can use the tragedy to suggest something to the reader to make a change within them, since you already have the power to imbue the reader with a sense of foolishness in your writing. I most definitely wish to see more of your work!

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